Writing 201 Day Four: Animal/Concrete/Enjambment

Today’s Prompt: Animal

Today’s Form: Concrete

Today’s Device: Enjambment

People say
The human race is some sort of
Bound to destroy itself
Consider this
The world goes on and on, but we are them still…
Thirteen glowing faces                                                     Eyes that search for love
Twenty-six eyes searching for prey                                                          Those creatures live
Two green eyes searching the world                                                        In this wicked life
Focused on the day                                                     We are them, so strong, but weak
Blue, green, amber, or gray                            Yet flail like fishes on land
                                  Like predators of the sea, we breathe

So far, this was the hardest assignment in Writing 201 for me.

These were the main points I wanted to make in my poem:

  • The first few lines are just supposed to be in regular format. It kind of helps to have a text that summarize the jumble of ideas in the concrete portion.
  • The circular part poem is supposed to go in any direction: Right to left, top to bottom, bottom to top, etc.
  • I tried to make a circle to show that even though we (as humans) like to see animals as very different from us, they aren’t.
  • I kind of feel like I’m revisiting the Lion King with the circle of life, but that’s kind of what it is. We have so many similarities to animals, and we all function together. The circular shape portrays that.

NOTE: Oh, by the way, I found this really good concrete poetry tool on languageisavirus.com Basically you copy and paste text and you can draw whatever you want with it. Check it out. I’ll probably make some posts with it in the future.


About heatherd001

Hello! My name is Heather. I'm sixteen years old and I love to write (poems mostly) but I'm working on some story- and novel-writing. Writing is a creative outlet for me.
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One Response to Writing 201 Day Four: Animal/Concrete/Enjambment

  1. You really thought about this one, didn’t you! I have been going around the circle, in both directions, and I realise that this truly is art. It leads the eye as a good painting should. It also makes an important ecological and ethical statement. You have created something really significant here. I wonder how many can see it? It needs a larger audience. I have been writing all of my life,I’m 60 years old. I’m pretty good, but I would be proud if I had created this..


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